THE LIZARD CAVE - XI

in #hive-1324102 years ago

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except from the previous episode

I took a longer path as if I was heading to the settlements, a slight ruse at deceiving the Old man whom I suspected to be staring as I walk away, when I was sure that I was alone, I resumed my mission on my long journey back to the caves with a rich quantity of Lobab root tucked within my cloak.

The journey back to the caves seemed longer than I hoped, I almost thought I was lost but the gradual sightings of black rocks littered around me gave me some hope as I journeyed.

After a couple of hours, I discovered the cave entrance, walking closer to the scene, my chest tightened with tension, I clutched the Lobab within my robes one more time, it felt like the only relief at the moment, I was filled with suspense about what had transpired within the caves during my absence, my empathy was solely focused on Misa and the fate of her father.

I hurriedly climbed into the caves and made my way through the secret tunnels that Misa showed me, passing through the ventilation area, towards the dense trail of smoke and crawling upwards to an opening, I could see some lights just ahead of me but I froze in my steps when I saw the dim lights interrupted by shadowy figures.

My head was just inches away from this opening, I held my breath, preparing to surrender, I reached down for the Lobab herbs within my cloak, my sole reason for this escapade, I hoped it would be sufficient to appease the Orktarg chiefs.

Suddenly, one of the Orktarg guards peeked into the opening, I saw his face toughen up with anger as he spotted me.

"He's in here!!!" The guard yelled as he dipped his hands to grab me out.

I got startled by the aggression and took a step backward but slid on a slippery surface and lost my footing, I took several stumbles downward, letting out painful grunts as my body thud against rocky surfaces, After a series of tumbles, I fell into an unfamiliar ditch.

I must have laid there for some minutes but I managed to roll over and grab my abdomen which was throbbing with hurt, with my eyes closed, I took several painful breaths.

I slowly opened my eyes and was surprised by a discovery - A green glowing object just inches from my face tucked into the wall, I immediately recognized it from my earlier visions during my encounter with the yellow Orb that Abin showed me.

It looked smaller compared to the rest of the other Orbs, the green glow illuminated my face with a bit of curiosity as I reached and touched it.

It felt warm to the touch but there was something else, I remembered the yellow Orb made me dizzy before it showed me those visions but this time around I felt a great rush of strength, The energy from the Orb gave me enough willpower to pull it out of the wall it was engraved.

I got up on my feet swiftly and held the glowing Orb in my hands, I remember Abin told me that the yellow Orb bonded with him and showed him some ancient wisdom that helped his people thrive in the caves but this green Orb seem to have given me some intense strength, I could feel the heat coursing through my veins with my jaws clenching.

It felt like I was being taken over by an unreal force, streaks of green lights tracing my veins and rose up my arms, the Orb was glued to my skin, I couldn't find the willpower to pull it off even if I wanted to, the rush of strength felt so overwhelming.

After a while, the green Orb stopped glowing and cooled down, It felt like I'd been holding my breath all this while, I finally took a deep breath and pondered on what I had just experienced, I took a closer look at the Orb totally astonished by the nature of this phenomenon.

I marveled at the effect of this encounter as I examined my limbs and muscle structure which appeared to be more defined.

As I was lost in my thoughts and totally unaware of my surroundings, suddenly, I felt a heavy thud hit the back of my head and lost consciousness.

STORYLINE

PART 1PART 2PART 3
PART 4PART 5PART 6
PART 7PART 8PART 9
PART 10

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This is such a great story line. One helpful tip though, try substituting your I with something else in some parts of your story. The constant repetition might be cringe worthy for some people. For example... in this line of yours...

I got up on my feet swiftly and held the glowing Orb in my hands, I remember Abin told me
Getting up to my feet with glowing orb in my hands, I remember Abin told me...

Hehehe. Just a suggestion from a fiction fan. See you soon.
DREEMPORT!

First person POV does has its limitations but you are correct, I was a bit too liberal with the "I"

Thanks for the feedback and enjoying the read 🙂

hey i just read my comment back - and i probably could have thought of a better word than cringeworthy! hahaha - pardon that word please!😅

lol It's alright, Actually, it was a solid tip that you gave me. what you pointed out was a gap in the writing that would have gradually gotten out of hand cause I didn't take notice of it.

part of being a creative is taking things with a grain of salt. 😃

😅I guess so...Thank you for not picking offence

True that. I read a lot of first POV and i find it amazing how they still get to play with words...
Hehe. It is a pleasure

Nice...was thrilling!! ... how will he deliver the herb to the man who needs it?

We can only hope for our hero to make it in time...

I appreciate you passing by and enjoying the read ☺️

Damn! That's a great one. Glad you shared on Listnerds!

Thanks for enjoying it... I'm glad you passed by ☺️

welcome nerd :P

Haha...

This is an interesting story indeed -- looking forward to the next part!

I'm glad you enjoyed it ☺️

Hi there... The next part is available here feel free to give it a read when you are free ☺️

Ooooh, NICE!!! I didn't realize that it was part of a series until the end haha.
So now I'm going to read the rest. You're very talented, love the art work!
I found you through Listnerds :)

Yeah... it is a full world-building project, I plan to achieve a full digital expansion with assets and even a 2D game adaptation in the future, lofty goals I know, but It is achievable 😃

Thanks for passing by, I'm glad you enjoyed it :-)

Yay! 🤗
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Is there a continuation because I need to know what happened after he passed out.

I love the concept, I was glued to the end of the post. There was a bit of suspense for me, I kept wondering if he was able fulfill his mission.

Thanks for enjoying the story :-)

Yes, it has a concluding part... I just realeased it today part 12

Cool. Why don't you apply for being a splinterlands Lore writer? came here thru listnerds

wow.. thanks for the info, I will make some further research on my end.

Although if you know a simpler way on how can I go about the application process, you can let me know... thanks for passing by 😃

Oh wow, now this has some thrills! I haven't read the other parts of the story but I'm now drawn to how it goes.

I'm glad you were able to connect with the plot.

Hope to see you around in the coming episodes ☺️

I did :) Thank you and see you around :) I found your story thru Dreemport by the way.

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