Lost love in bloom again - Fiction Story prompt 97

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On December 23, Joni, who was at the supermarket, accidentally saw a beautiful woman shopping. He was curious about the woman because she felt quite familiar. Joni is still trying to remember who that woman is. Then Joni ventured to approach the woman. After taking a closer look, it turns out that she is Lily, his ex-girlfriend when he was in high school.

"Excuse me miss, are you Lily?" asked Joni.

"OMG, Joni, I didn't expect to see you here again."

"Wow, it turns out you still remember me. How are you?"

"Of course, you haven't changed. I'm fine, how about you?".

"I'm also very nice. Nice to meet you here".

Their conversation continued while selecting items in the supermarket. Joni and Lily used to be passionate lovers at their school. When he graduated from high school, Joni received a scholarship to continue his studies in Japan. While Lily did not go to college. This beautiful woman works at a famous restaurant in the city of Medan as a waitress. Thus, the two of them no longer communicate with each other.

Five years have passed, and Joni, who has finished studying in Japan, is now working at Nikkon Corporation, the largest company in the city of Jakarta as an executive director. Meanwhile, Lily is now married to an ordinary employee who works at the Nikkon Corporation. But, Lily didn't mention Joni about her husband's job.

"So, are you settled in this town now?" she asked.

"Yes, of course. Now I work at Nikkon Corporation. However, I will go to Medan city tomorrow to celebrate Christmas and New Year with my family. I miss them there" Joni answered.

"Really? Then I want to come with you. It's been a long time since I've seen my father and mother in Medan" Lily was very excited talking to Joni.

"Okay, but you have to ask your husband's permission first" Joni replied.

Lily nodded in agreement with a smile. After that, they returned to their respective homes. All the way home, Lily smiled and was happy. It seems like an old love that was once lost is now blossoming again. Lily went straight to the back room to her husband, smiling. She asked her husband for permission to go to Medan to celebrate Christmas with her father and mother. Roni, Lily's husband nodded in agreement with his wife's request.

At midnight, when Roni was fast asleep, Lily took her cell phone and called Joni. Lily told Joni that her husband had allowed her to return to Medan, where she was born. So, Lily asked Joni to buy a plane ticket for her. Then they talked for quite a while, Lily's conversation on the phone woke Roni up. But he didn't get out of bed. Just listen.

The next day, Joni picks up Lily at the supermarket where they met yesterday. They will also go to the airport to fly to the city of Medan. While at the airport, the plane was about to depart, but suddenly Joni's stomach became heartburn and he wanted to go to the toilet.

"Lily, you first get on the plane, I'll come after 10 minutes," Joni said.

"Where are you going?" she asked.

"My stomach suddenly hurts, I have to go to the toilet for a while" Joni answered.

"Okay, I'll wait on the plane."

Lily and Joni got the front seats. While on the plane, a 50-year-old man sat in the seat that was supposed to be occupied by Lily and Joni.

"Excuse me, sir, this is my seat," said Lily.

"Who are you?"

"I'm a passenger here"

"I'm also a passenger and I also bought a ticket, so you don't manage me"

Lily was annoyed and told this to the stewardess. Then the stewardess said to the man.

"Sorry sir, your seat should be in the back. This seat belongs to this lady" said the stewardess.

"Who are you?"

"I'm a stewardess here"

"What's a stewardess?"

"A stewardess is a person who serves passengers on this plane sir"

"Oh, just a maid. I don't want to move, I want to sit here"

The stewardess was also annoyed and told the pilot. The pilot came and said to the man. "Excuse me, sir, may I see your ticket"

"Here" while showing the ticket.

"Sorry sir, the ticket says that you are in seat number 30, so you have to sit in the back."

"Who are you?"

"I pilot here"

"What are pilots?"

"Pilot is the person who drives this plane sir"

"Oh, apparently it's just a driver. I don't want to move. I'll still sit here"

Lily, the stewardess, and the pilots were at a loss to deal with this. Not long after, Joni came and asked the three of them. Joni nodded and understood this. Then Joni approached the man and asked, "Good afternoon sir, may I know where you are going?"

"I want to go to Medan and I don't want to move from this chair"

"Oh I see, but the seats in front for departure to Bogor city. For departure to Medan city in the back seat"

"Who are you?"

"I am a passenger going down to Bogor city, if you sit here, you will get off in Bogor city"

"Why didn't you say so earlier!!"

Annoyed, the man stood up from the chair and moved backward. Lily smiled to hold back her laughter, as did the pilot and stewardess. Not long after, the plane flew to the city of Medan. All passengers and crew arrived safely.


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Arriving in the city of Medan, Joni and Lily stopped at a restaurant for lunch. After that, they did not go straight to their parents' house. But, they booked a hotel for one day. They want to be together reminiscing about the good old days. While being engrossed together in a hotel bed, suddenly the hotel maid knocked on their room door. When Lily opened the door, Roni pushed the door wide open.

"Oh, so this is your reason for going to Medan city?" Roni said coldly.

"Don't get me wrong Ron, we didn't do anything here"

"Not doing? I don't think your answer is correct. You should say that you haven't done"

"What do you mean Roni?"

"If I don't come, what are you two doing in this room together?"

"I'm sorry Ron, I intend to meet my mother in Medan to celebrate Christmas"

"Never mind, tomorrow I will divorce you. I know he is my boss, he is your former lover. If you want him, go ahead"

Roni also left the hotel. Lily never realized that Roni had been following her since morning. When Roni woke up in the middle of the night, Roni started to have suspicions about his wife because he was chatting with other men on the phone. When Lily went to sleep, Roni ordered plane tickets online. Therefore, Roni followed Lily away without anyone knowing.

The end.

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I love the part where a guy won't move to the back seat 😁

thank you

Wow! The husband is a genius in tracking 💯. See how he caught the two. Well, the truth is that, as long as they're both in the hotel room, it's considered cheating already

Thank you for visiting and reading. Yes, as smart as someone who has an affair, they will be caught later

Wow what a turnout of event, Lily isn't a faithful wife or maybe she never did loved her husband.

And it turned out that Joni is her husband boss... Wow! That was unexpected.

Nice story but I wish there was more to what really made Lily that way towards her husband.

thank you for visiting my post mam. I forgot to create that part

Hello @radenkusumo666,

You have a very involved story here and you tell it with flourish. Actually, you have two stories. Each one could stand on its own, but in order to be part of the same piece they should be connected. The scene with the man on the plane is entertaining and a well-written diversion. However, it is just that: a diversion. You do not connect it with the drama around Roni, Lily and Joni. We wonder as we read, is the obnoxious passenger a spy for Roni? But no. He and his seat issue are completely separate.

That vignette, buried in a story about betrayal and loyalty, is out of place. We recommend you take that little gem and make a full story out of it. This could be really funny.

As for the drama around the three main characters: readers of course cannot approve of Lily's behavior. She seems to be shallow and disloyal. It would be interesting to understand more about her motivation. Why is she with Roni if she has so little feeling for him? He is suspicious. We would like to know more about what might be a pattern of flirtatious behavior by Lily. You could round out the character more instead of taking a detour to the man in the airplane.

This is an interesting story. Much potential. Thank you for sharing it with us. We appreciate that you support other authors in the community with your comments.

Thank you very much for the advice. I will try to be better in the next fiction story