in #hive-170798 • 2 months ago

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Hello @fonpet,

Your story has an interesting core. However, as @medemausi's comment indicates below, you keep us guessing about the genetic 'gift'. It would be good for you to let the reader into this mystery (for you do make it a mystery) early on in the story. Even in the end, we're not sure what the gift is. It has something to do with dentition, but we can't understand exactly what. Does the genetic trait have a name?

This would be important for the reader's to understand your evolution as a character.

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      Oh, I didn't see it that way. However, the genetic blessing was revealed at the end of the story:

      "I have never ceased to flaunt my genetic blessing - my impacted dentition with pride since that time because I know the one who created me did not hate me for having given me such a unique blessing".

      Thank you so much for the observation, I'll pay attention to that in my subsequent submissions, @theinkwell.

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