A String of Poems...

in #hive-1614652 years ago

I have this thing for creating what could be a poem but it is broken down into whatever stanzas my mind gave priority...

i.)

In my dreams
Every night I go to bed wearing a smile
There is a house with old rustic walls
Sitting halfway down a slope
With a charcoal stove
Warming it from the centre of its earthen floor
Brewing chai for the old boys
Who flock its simplistic seats
To share old tales.

ii.)

In a sea of lost souls
I have longed to find the altars that ooze
Unconditional love against all odds
Only to stare into the emptiness of humanity
Weathering more than what
My mother sang to me whilst I was living
In her womb.

iii.)

There is a sadness pegged in your pretty eyes
And I recognise it
From looking at my reflection
For hours on end
When these masks no longer fit my face
And if anyone were to stir
The emotional storm lurking within
It would bleed from the corners.

iv.)

Beyond the walls around my broken heart
Is a young lover fixated on a future
Tucked away deep in a rainforest
Writing poetry and eating wild berries
With my imperfect self.

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Do share your thoughts :)

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Your words always stir up so much in me, I sometimes feel like you are writing exactly how I feel or have felt. You know how much I love your writing, you create such beautiful pictures into your world, where we can witness your honesty and feel your pain, you bring it all to life with your skill of writing xxxxx

Oh, my love. You humble me so with these encouraging words that scream support and confess the love to see a fellow woman and mother flourish. I am embracing our pain. Theirs and ours. And I'll use it to free all of us the same way you all free me.

Thank you so much for the gift of friendship 🧡

Only to stare into the emptiness of humanity

Humanity is so complicated that we learn by experience and as time goes on. Being insatiable we struggle all through life but end up most times not getting much.

Nice work here

Humanity is so complicated

Isn't it though?

But I believe in our complexity lies our simplicity and this makes it all worthwhile. Thank you so much for stopping by 🔆

Hola Poeta @tezmel. Exquisito sentir poético. La estructura que le otorgaste traducen intencionalidad, quizás de conciencia, en su peculariedad y singularidad. En la osadía de interpretar, aplicando un poco de semiótica, las estrofas ii y iii, reflejan el sentimiento de malestar y negación a lo convulso de la sociedad actual, humanos sin humanidad. Además se manifiesta una profunda tristeza. Asimismo, la ambigüedad y la falsedad simbolizadas por la magia y el misticismo de las "máscaras". No obstante las estrofas extremos i y ii, simbolizan todo un cúmulos de valores y principios positivos propios, que contrarrestan y son la intencionalidad de construir un mundo mejor. La estrofa i, es tu formación, tus orígenes, tu idiosincracia y cosmovisión. Finalizas, con un sentir motivador y esperanzador, una invitación a que los cambios son posibles y que como seres imperfectos, evolucionamos día a día. Me gustó buscar significados y significancia a tus versos. Quizás sea errado, distante a lo esperado pero es mi mirada como lectora.
Hasta otro encuentro.
Feliz semana para tí y los tuyos.

Hello Poet @tezmel. Exquisite poetic feeling. The structure you gave it translates intentionality, perhaps of conscience, in its peculiarity and singularity. In daring to interpret, applying a bit of semiotics, stanzas ii and iii, reflect the feeling of discomfort and denial to the convulsions of today's society, humans without humanity. In addition, deep sadness is manifested. Likewise, the ambiguity and falsehood are symbolized by the magic and mysticism of the "masks". However, the extreme stanzas i and ii, symbolize a whole accumulation of values and positive principles, which counteract and are the intentionality of building a better world. Stanza i, is your formation, your origins, your idiosyncrasy, and worldview. You end with a motivating and hopeful feeling, an invitation that changes are possible and that as imperfect beings, we evolve day by day. I enjoyed looking for meanings and significance in your verses. Maybe it is wrong, and distant from what I expected, but it is my view as a reader.
Until another encounter.
Happy week to you and yours.
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Wow. Poetry is so interesting! From one poet to another, I am here enjoying your perspective and I can't help but feel seen.

When I write, I just do. I don't structure anything other than how I feel like my lines flow. Sometimes, I feel like my work is more prose than poetry but everyone else calls it poetic and so I tend to agree with my readers.

Thank you so much for stopping and sharing your thoughts :)

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Thank you so much @momogrow :)

"Could be a poem"? I think it's a quite good poem, or multiple good poems. Either way each cluster is pregnant with meaning. I especially enjoy the imagery of number III.

I feel I'm being bombarded with strings of words, drained and dried. The lyrics in this poem carries a lot of emotional powers, strong enough to purge and cleanse you.

Soar!!

Your poems try to capture a feeling and an essence. They have a melancholic air about them, like beads of rain down the window glass.

Nice!

All these kind words coming from a fellow poet and creative leave me feeling like I am on the right path! How I wish it is easy to capture the exact feeling but still, I try.

Thank you for stopping by :)

Oh, what a wonderful string of poems as you call it. I really loved it. There is a touch and feeling (or emotion) in your words I cannot accurately transcribe. But it makes me long for "older days", and not the cliche "I want to go back to older days". But something mystical, something non-existent. I am longing for something that did not happen and will not happen, but I am longing. The internet has words for every feeling these days, so maybe there is a word to capture this feeling but it is not nostalgia.

I loved these two lines, they are really powerful in their simplicity and weighty in their imagery:

Every night I go to bed wearing a smile

Only to stare into the emptiness of humanity

Read like that together now in this comment, out of their original context, they are even more powerful. Wow, thank you so much for sharing!

How humbling :)

Thank you so much for your kind words. I have a thing for seemingly simple poems and I get really excited when someone else relates to them the way you have.

Expressing my emotions is a hide-and-seek game between my poetic boldness and a bruised ego. Happy to hear it entices you.

The lines you chose echo bits of my past in a bittersweet manner as the people those first represent are dead but experiencing them stayed on.

And thank you again for the kind words :)

simple poems

They really do carry the most weight.

someone else relates

It is not easy, but when you have the talent you have it! So well done.

hide-and-seek game

That is really such a beautiful way of stating it. This is awesome imagery.

experiencing them stayed on

Memories are sometimes the best inspiration for writing, but they mostly help (me) create. You cannot create from nothing, but you cannot constantly rehash the same thing. So memories help me create, maybe it is the same for you?

Best of luck and I am looking forward to your other writings.