Tonight

dante31 in #hive-161465 • 2 years ago

this is the final straw

I can't take it anymore

all that's left in me is anger

regrets and despair

I can feel the world gazing at me

I feel the shame

I want it all to end tonight

I'm a falling star

fading into nothingness

to be forgotten

at least I burn out in glory

My light turned into darkness

no insight can make it right

I don't want to fight

I've given up already

my thoughts are filled with draughts

I've unlocked all the thoughts I have inside

I can't hold it in anymore

implode or explode

It doesn't matter

It ends tonight

^{Photo by Alex Green from Pexels}

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2 years ago in #hive-161465 by dante31

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wongi 2 years ago

I can't hold it in anymore

implode or explode

It doesn't matter

It ends tonight

These last lines sound like the words a person says before they commit suicide😃.

Eitherways, I like the progression of the poem. It sounds like a person in distress. A person who is on the verge of giving up.

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dante31 2 years ago

Yeah, you're right. It's what the poem was all about. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.

Thank you

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wongi 2 years ago

It's always a pleasure 🤗✨

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lenaspiritual 2 years ago

I think a little hope would have been nice in this poem, like the speaker's attitude is negative, it's like everything is done and finished for him/her, but it sure does show the feelings of the speaker very well.
Thanks for sharing.

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