An alien fish on the planet of the marfishes

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On the planet Neptune there are a great variety of aquatic beings of great intelligence, it was always a lie when they said that this planet was gaseous, No! there are oceans! the intelligence of its inhabitants is so incredible that they have been able to create technology just by thinking about it, it is a race of fish called "nepfish", of great proportions that can measure up to 40 meters long and even more, as well as there are also small fish that are just being born in the coral reefs of this unknown world.
On the other side of the solar system there is another world, a world totally different from what these fish usually know, this world is of water too, but of frozen water! and land that has never known the warmth of a sensational summer, at this end there are other creatures very different from the fish, the race of this planet does not live in water but in a cold and eternal winter, these beings have 4 legs, crawl through the earthly world of winter and are covered by large tons of hair, As on the planet of the fish, here there are beings of 100 meters high as well as 30 centimeters, a particularity of these beings is that they have highly developed vision, so much so that rays of light come out when they open their eyes, these beings are the "marcat", they are also very intelligent and are able to communicate by telepathy.
What an interesting situation exists here!
The nepfish have such advanced technology that they are able to leave their planet to explore the neighborhood, an incredible feat, traveling as fast as they do in the ocean currents of their planet, but this time in space, on this occasion, we have a little friend named X-AEI-II, this little alien fish was curiously visiting the world of the marcat, He was very surprised because the color of the planet was quite similar to his own, only this was a darker tone with white swirls, passing the atmosphere of the planet he realized that the gravity was a little heavier than in his planet, so he felt a strong pressure in his ship.

-Oh, it's getting worse and worse- our friend Nepfish said to himself, observing everything around him, he was losing control until he reached solid ground and with just a thought he made something appear that could cushion his abrupt descent, a mechanical device, a rubber band made with pure nanobots.
-Ugh, that was close," he said as he stirred the water in his fish tank, when he began to observe the place carefully, he found it amazing everything that was there, mostly it was all a white substance that spread in space, everything, absolutely everything had to do with this peculiar element, the most interesting thing is that when you try to touch that element, it disappears.

Wow what things exist here! Among the depths of this mysterious substance, the vibrations of large footsteps were felt at one end, our friend X-AEI-II realized how giant could be whatever could be producing those footsteps, suddenly, everything changed, that substance that could be seen in the surroundings disappeared, and the figure of a strange creature appeared before the eyes of our friend X-AEI-II, his face was huge, with big and mysterious eyes that change colors, his face was covered with something he had never seen before, like a layer of very thin algae.
This huge creature passed by without noticing the presence of our friend X-AEI-II, but at that moment X-AEI-II was not alone, behind this creature there were small beings just like him, immediately our nepfish friend panicked, because these beings called marcats, began to see him a little strange.

They spoke a language that X-AEI-II managed to decipher, and when he understood he decided to take action quickly, he concentrated a little to reorganize all the thoughts in his mind and take control of the ship.

What could it be, we have never seen it before, an intruder..." said the marcats observing him with their big and luminous eyes, immediately, one of them climbed into their ship and began to make an effort to break the glass that divided X-AEI-II from them, with sharp claws that it had on its front legs.

I must get out of here! -All the marcats moved away and made a strange noise that X-AEI-II didn't understand, except for one of them that stayed right under his ship.
Why isn't it moving? X-AEI-II wondered, when suddenly he realized that he and his ship couldn't do it either.

X-AEI-II realized that the gaze of the small marcat kept him paralyzed, in front of him was the big creature he had seen at the beginning and he realized that it was watching him.

I'm in trouble, X-AEI-II closed his eyes and thought quickly before the giant marcat did anything, when he finally opened them again he realized he was on his home planet Neptune, as if nothing had happened.

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Oh wow! What a fantasy. Your imagination is out of this world 😄. I thought as I read of Gulliver's Travels. Then I thought a little bit of Alice after she went down the rabbit hole. The story fits wonderfully with the collage.

Some parts of the story are funny (after looking at the collage, that is):

observing him with their big and luminous eyes,

Some phrases are poetic:

the race of this planet does not live in water but in a cold and eternal winter,

A telepathic fish that lives on an aqueous plant. Truly an adventure.

If I might make a suggestion for the future: be careful about placing periods at the end of sentences. There seems to be an issue concerning periods with some writing that is translated from Spanish. Commas often appear where periods should be. Your writing is wonderfully imaginative and this little fix will make it even better.

Pleasure to read your fantastic piece, @edgarafernandezp.

Hi @agmoore thank you very much for your comments, I will take it into account to improve :D, I'm so glad you were able to read the story and liked it! :)

Hello @edgarafernandezp This is an interesting story with a stunning image, well done on that! 👍
You have used the creative non-fiction tag, which is an obvious error for your fantasy story.
Please could you edit the first tag from #creativenonfiction to #fiction and please notify us of the change. Thank you:)
We use this opportunity to invite you to check out the creative non-fiction prompt that's pinned in the community.

Also, The Ink Well has some great resources in our catalog of fiction writing tips. For example, we have tips on developing characters in your stories, and integrating action, dialog and narrative. These resources can help you learn how to include the important elements of fiction in your stories.

Thanks for stopping by, and we look forward to an update from you:)

Oh right, I just changed it, thank you very much :D

Thanks for the update:)