In The Beginning...

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Today is the last day to write the first part of a three-part fiction story for @Dreemport. Now, if you look at stories and life, they all have a beginning, middle, and end. The question becomes, which part do you make the beginning? There are many ways to start a story and wind it around, so the future could be the story's beginning.

You could start at someone's funeral and backtrack to explain how they wound up in a casket with people telling each other how wonderful their friend looks when all they want to do is cry. Would that be the beginning of the end? And is that really the beginning or the place the author needed to start because they had no idea where to start but knew the main character would die in the end?

It gets complicated writing stories. It is more complex when you want to do well, and you know everyone is hoping you play along with the task they are trying to accomplish. You start to second guess yourself, and that bubble of self-doubt grows larger and larger until you are surrounded by a vast globby mess in your mind and heart.





You give yourself a pep talk. How this story is like any other. Just relax and go with the flow, except right now, your flow is self-doubt. You want to give up because it is too complicated and what if you fail? How silly would you look!! No one likes to be considered foolish for trying to do something they are not good at.

If you never try things out of your comfort zone, you never know what the outcome will be, now do we? I have seen so many wonderful people write stories who said they never could. The trick, or one of them, is to write just for yourself and no other. You will find yourself relaxing sitting in front of a keyboard.

Once relaxed, your mind is free to tell your fingers where to go on your keyboard, and low and behold, words start forming on the page, and in your head, you can not type fast enough.



But it all has to start with that terrifying beginning.

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I wonder when the world first started if God was scared too. Is that why it took him six days to make the world? Was God too afraid to make a mistake, so they took each part of making the world one slow step at a time? We are made in his image, and we, too, want to make something perfect and right. These are interesting thoughts, but a fiction story is still not being written.

I wonder how many days of thinking and planning God took before they felt perfect about starting the making. Do we really think that even God just woke up one morning and said to themselves, "huh, let's make a new world today!" and Poof! It began.

If we go with this theory, I wonder what would have happened on the eighth day. Do you just build this beautiful place and then walk away? I feel this would be very hard to let go of. I think most would feel some responsibility to leave someone in charge to oversee what you just spent all your time and energy making.





I think too that after making a new world, you would need a lot of rest. Building a world that is designed to run itself cannot be easy. Designed to give all those who choose to live on it the resources to accomplish just that. I know I would need a nap. A pretty long rest, to be sure! So who in the new world would you pick to oversee your creation?

Unicorns, of course! How can there be any other choice if you think about it? They are magical creatures that would help in case something unforeseeable happens. They are connected to the earth and sky in ways we humans can never understand. Now we are getting somewhere. A beginning. Unicorns. Right.

I guess next would be naming the unicorns in charge of New Earth. We want to feel connected to them, and names help a person do that. I am horrible at remembering people's names, but this isn't about me. It's about everyday people, of which I am not.





To make life fair for all boys and girls, we should probably have a girl and boy in charge of New Earth. Hmm... I'm going to go out on a limb here and make the two unicorns married. I should not be the only person blissfully married for life. Right, Queen Isla and King Elgar are now running the show. Sigh, we are getting somewhere, maybe, I think.

Everyone needs a place to call home. It makes a person feel grounded on this earth. We could put our King and Queen in a beautiful meadow filled with wildflowers, but if it would rain, you can not have royalty getting wet and muddy. It just isn't done. Trust me on this. Mud is a wonderful thing, do not get me wrong, but there is a time and place for it, and it just isn't done on a King and Queen of New Earth.



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A large field of wildflowers surrounded by water that is the clearest blue one will ever find is surrounded by mountains that reach the sky. In the middle of this stunning sight is a castle that gleams bright white. On the top of the uppermost walls are huge shiny copper bowls that glow during the day and are lit with fires each night to show the way for weary travelers that might come this way.

The castle is filled with all the creatures of New Earth. Each to play their part. It is now up to the king and queen to assign tasks to everyone. This is the part where magic comes in handy. Queen Isla has the gift of looking someone in the eye and knowing what they excel at and what makes a person happy.

Do not get me wrong, it is still a long process to look each person in a new castle in the eye and figure out what the heck you are going to DO with them. All the while keeping in mind the bazillion tasks it takes to run a castle and a New Earth.





The King and Queen had better hoped they slept well the night before they got plopped into their new castle and were given a poop ton of work they now were responsible for. I'm thinking it is going to take about a year to get everything up and running smoothly for the two.

I also think we, as readers, should give them the privacy they need to learn how to be King and Queen in their first year on New Earth. It really is the proper, polite thing to do.

Yes, Yes, I promise we will check on them after their learning year is up.

I guess? We just made a new beginning for a tale that will need to be told. Huh, imagine that!



You can find Part Two here: In the Beginning Part 2 - New Earth



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What a fun story ♥️ I hope our king and queen are up for the job!

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Okay now. This long and queen need all the rest that they can have. This world building so sweet and subtle. I like the progression of the story. Soft, imaginative and endearing. Sounds like it’s going to be something long and interesting.

I hope it becomes something special for any that read it.

Thank you so much for your kindness and for stopping to read!

Clearly, God was enjoying himself, when He created Aardvarks, Artichokes and Penises... I mean, look at them? They're the most bizarre looking things! Or maybe those were the mistakes you were worried about?

I do not think they were mistakes........
I think they work like intended :D

Unicorns is one of my favourite creature although there is no existence of it in this world. I have seen unicorn in "Beyblade metal masters" anime for the first time. And the hero (Chinga- i am using in my profile picture) had the unicorn power in his Beyblade.

Challenge just started and in the first part of fiction we get some knowledge about fiction but i am sure 2 part will be the most interesting one .

⏫⏏️This One looking very good. I loved it very much.

I am so happy you like the beginning of the story.
Thank you for stopping to read it and your kind comments

Now we are getting somewhere.

I bet after a year, King El and Queen La will have lots of experiences to share with us.

LOVE YOU!!

MISS YOU already!!

HUGS!

Unicorns, kings, queens - what could be any better? Looking forward to more of your story!

Sadly, I failed - I didn't get it done today because of - work - hmpf! I had such a crazy day that didn't leave a single moment for anything else - but, I won't fret, I will write my story and just not submit it to Dreemport.

I hope it is just a lil' cold and you're feeling much better already!

:( I am so sorry you did not make it by the timeline. I REALLY hope you still write your story and next week you can do part 2 by Friday. :D

Stupid work!!

I am trying. I am resting a lot so hopefully, by Monday I will feel better!!

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That’s beautiful @snook. I can’t wait for more and just for inspiration I have a unicorn drawing for you.

Aweeeeeeeeeee!!! THANK YOU so much for the unicorn drawing!! I LOVE it!

Do not get me wrong, it is still a long process to look each person in a new castle in the eye and figure out what the heck you are going to DO with them.

The queen must also be the queen of stares considering how many people she’s going to be looking into the eyes of. It would be bad if she also had Aphrodite’s power. We would all be bewitched!

HAAAAAAAAAAA!

Thank you so much for stopping to read my story!

No, thank YOU for that wonderful piece. I’m left to wonder for a full week what the earth ruled by the Unicorn king and queen will look like in the next chapter:)

Quite a philosophical and insightful beginning of a new tale.

I really loved to read the point that He who had created the world wouldn't leave all the things unguarded. It is quite thought provoking. It explains the reason behind the creation of man kind.

Eagerly waiting to read what the King and queen would do after their learning period is over

aweeeee Thank You!!

and thanks for stopping to read my story!!

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Super creative take on the challenge, Snook 😁

Love it! ❤️

Looking forward to the next bit! ...

Thanks Nicky!!

I am so happy you liked it :D

Lets hope the 2nd part is good too!! :D

I have absolute faith it will be!

Keen to see how it unfolds. Clever you 😊👏

I love it! Talk about starting from the very beginning, like when they first starting building Versailles! They did have a little trouble then though, as they had way too much time, money, freedom, and recreational drugs. But maybe your kingdom will rise above such indulgences! Let them eat cake :D

Can't wait to read more about it!

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Thank you!!

Lets hope the drugs stay out of the story :D

Oh I loved this refreshing take on an intro to a story Snook! I am now most definitely looking forward to your part 2 ...which I will be able to support with my upvote... as I came to this one too late... that's the thing this week having to read doubled up posts to be able to engage more fully hehe. I am sure looking forward to how Queen Isla and King Elgar go about running this wonderful world created by God. !LUV !ALIVE !LADY

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What a fascinating read. 👏👏 Easy to follow, flowed nicely, interesting concept to boot. I've never thought about writing in this style, thanks for adding another hook to the bucket list. 😁 I also like that it can serve as a standalone or the beginning of some huge epic. 👌 Good shit.

If I was to give you feedback, I'd say watch out on the punctuation front. You're not bad, but sometimes commas are missing, and other times they are there when they don't need to be. 😁 It's no biggie, no biggie at all. But I felt like you should be aware of it. (you might already be, but we're about improving one's craft here more than anything 😌)

Good stuff, thanks for the hook idea, and I'm curious to read more of your writings now. 🙂

Thank you so very much!!

I hope you try the hook idea out!!

Do you just build this beautiful place and then walk away?

From what I understand, God walked with Man ♥️

Just revisiting this series :) ...

God did and still does; sometimes, he sends his Angels to help too.

HUGS!

Yes, very true ♥️

In the beginning, the plan was formed and in it, unicorns took on a very important role. A role that was far too important for any kind of mud splattering to take place. Lol!

I love how you spun out a unique opening for a story here, Snook. I'm already looking forward to next Friday to see how you continue. 💛

Thank You so much!! Your words mean so much to me!

This is a classic breaking the fourth wall - and I LOVE IT. It SO works with this - coming alongside the journey with the author as she is building this world that we will inhabit for the next 200 or so pages... (because I think this is going to be much more than a 3-parter - right hehehe this is just the start of somethig wonderful)

And a new world, and unicorns, king and queen.... leaving them for a year - wondering what are they doing? are tehy working together? are they bickering together? hehehe are the divvying up the duties... or are they fighting over who gets what???

my imagination is already piqued hehehe and I want more and more and more!!!!

spellbound :) this reader is yours!

Thank YOU
Now I can breathe.

LOVE YOU!

Now I am going back to sleep so I get over this cold/couph/whatever it is I have thingy.

I love you Snook

so much

please rest and take care - you've done a lot this week - lots of happy with Alex and Ledis hehehe

but now its time to recover :)

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You're welcome @snook! Have a nice day 😊👍

Hmm, interesting indeed!! Now I can't wait to know how the king and queen manage to flow inside the writers head and bringing them to action.

You were really so creative in getting this tale on, I'm sure it will be superb.

Dreemport brought me here.

Thank you so much for your kind words.
I hope the 2nd part doesn't disappoint.

Hugs!

I'm sure it won't 😊.

Thank you 😘❤️.

A great adventure just this beginning, I can not imagine the continuation and we will have to be aware of what follows. It is very interesting what you are building for this challenge and I am sure you will do very well. Greetings.

Thank You!!

For the love of milk shakes! I love how you started. This was like a tutorial. While I was getting chores done today, I had no idea how I'd continue with My series. But then it came to me. You are amazing with the way you told this. A lesson and Fiction all in one. And Yes, I'll see how are King and Queen will do.. hehehe. I'm coming back soon!!!

Thank You so very much for stopping to read and for your wonderful comment!!!

I guess next would be naming the unicorns in charge of New Earth.

♥️♥️ Unicorns in charge!!!!

Unbelievable story! I agree with @dreemsteem this can be one heck of good book! Best seller even!!

THANK YOU so much for stopping and for your very kind words!!

Your intro really got me. 'Oh, she isn't writing a fictional story, she's writing a comment on the contest. Trying to give hope to us and help us overcome self-doubt'

And all of a sudden, poof, we're in your world. Sucked right in without realizing until it's too late. Ok. Well, it's not a bad thing. Pretty nice in this world. Oh, look, unicorns. I wonder what's going on here.
Oh, one can watch a world being created. That's nice, nothing to miss out on.
I take that back. I miss out on how it continues. Don't leave me hanging just yet.
Argh, damn you dreemport (joking) for making it a three-parter.
I get hooked on all this stuff and am full of suspense.

Ok, I took the liberation of following your lead. Your way of writing was a great inspiration, it instantaneously sparked the idea of returning the favor :-)

And I want to leave you with another saying from my dad: "Perfect is the enemy of good. So don't waste your time trying to be perfect or people will say it's no good"
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I was going to write more but I noticed it was already over 1200 words and was like !!!!!!!!! No one will want to read that much :D

and yes, reading all these first parts I am left going !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I want more :D

Thank You so much for your wonderful comment!!