Hello @jennyzee1,

You have a good build up in this story. Great scene development. Your description of the apartment when Amy returns is great, especially the detail about her coffee cup. However, the story stops abruptly. When Amy asks what they can do at the end, we want to know. The author has a responsibility to resolve that issue one way or another. It's because you have kept readers' interest that they want to know. If the story had been boring we wouldn't care:)

Read this Inkwell post about story arcs. In this post you will find a good explanation for how an author should wind up a story and give the reader a satisfying ending.

Also, please engage with two authors for each story you publish here. We see that you did engage with one. Thank you.

Good writing, @jennyzee1