This is such a good story. We can feel your frustration with Josh, and we share that as we read. Which of us has not met such a dreamer? I think we all know someone who waits for fortune to change. But fortune is usually not so kind.

You have something to say in this piece, and you express your idea clearly. However, there is something lacking in your story: editing. This story would have received much higher curation if you had caught many of the minor errors that dot the piece. Go over your writing more carefully once you have finished. (Please don't use an AI editor to rewrite!)

It would be nice for your ideas to shine more clearly in your writing. We look forward to seeing that skill development.